Ches writeing purpose

The messed up and wonderful cave

 

Ivy matt and che 

Deadly cave 

Zombielike animals

Teleporter lake

Dinos 
WALT full writing 

The cave 

Screeching of the police and ambulances race to the rescue. 

Hi im Che me and my friends matt and ivy we have been neighbours 

For ages. We live next to a dig site and I think someone has gotten really badly hurt.

9.00am

“Ivy wake up,matt wake up look at the digsite what should we go have a look because I want to go this will be cool”

10.00am 

“Were ready”
Matt and Ivy said .We meet at the digsite
“Che look at this rock,”
said Matt “what that's just a pebble” we go inside
“ HELP HELP I'M STUCK HELP!!!!” “What was that” by the time I said that Ivy and matt already diving in the darkness.

When we get there we end up wrenching him out then Ivy and matt looked shocked.
“what’s wrong”
“nothings wrong it is Josh” I did something that a cartoon character would do.

Josh fell into a hole in the ground, he is a big strong sort of guy, he was very hungry lucky Ivy has food in her bag. We start to move deeper and deeper into the cave Josh had found a pebble that has weird lines all over it. 

We see a weird animal in the distance
“ eww it's a dead rat” said Ivy the rat has no head and guts pouring out there is a trail of them so we followed the trail and at the end it was hard to breath, we see a purple lake “look here a sword
” Said matt
“this is giving me the creeps” che said

Then we put the tent next to the lake. 

Matt goes out of the tent and sees the dead rat trail one of the rats move it was the one with no head Matt said to us” do you know that rat with no head WELL IT'S MOVING” Che said” nah that would have been a bad dream” “WELL GO OUTSIDE THEN” we go out of the tent
“NOPE YOUR NOT LYING”. 

Che grabs the sword and kills the ZoMbIe RaTs “wow I better have a wash” the water splashes as they jump in the purple lake when they look under the water and see a hole! 

Che goes first out of the portal Ivy 2nd Matt 3rd Josh 4th “where are we” said Josh “dunno” I said (im che) I see something in the distance it's a TREX
“RUN!!”
Ivy says “ there's a cave in the distance then we dive in to the cave “where are we?” said matt “where's Josh, he came right?”

While we were walking, we found a wall that had little lines that looked like a puzzle and the missing lines were shaped like a dragon
"Matt do you still have that rock" "Yeah, why?" "can I have it " "shure" "thanks" the Purple wall I think that this is the portal lets go through "OF" "What?" "GET OFF" Josh was yelling at me "
when we went through I must of smashed into him we get avoid the crawling mice and we ran home pulled the lever and the cave fell down wow we got out alive.

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